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intro to my story xD

Mon Jul 20, 2009, 5:26 AM
i thought that i would put the introduction to my story on here, to see what you think, it's not very good but i felt like writing a story anyway. if there's bits i should cut out or anything please give me advice.
my story hasn't got a name yet, i thought i'd write it before i thought of the title.
i'm writing chapter 5 at the moment.
summary.
Sadie-Ann is a boy obsessed teen who is always getting herself into all sorts of trouble. The boys love her and her friend Alyssa, Sadie and Alyssa are with each other 24/7. Sadie falls head over heals for Dylan but did she make the right decision?


Let me introduce myself

well it all started when I was 11, and we all went on holiday to Germany, not that im a lover of the Germans after what happened with what’s his face with the funny moustache. that’s when it all started, liking boys and all, well ever since then I have been completely obsessed. TOO OBSESSED! Well not in a get-your-kit-off-and-jump-in-my-bed sort of way but y’know…
before that holiday In Germany I hated boys and wanted nothing to do with them. But now I love the buggahs. Well back to the holiday in Germany, there was these two mint drop-dead-gorgeous boys fighting over a rubber ring. No boys was interested in me before I hit puberty, I was minging. Now I think I’m quite prettyish, not being vain or nothing. Anyway, those boys was fit! There names were Cameron and Luke, I had their numbers and all - wink wink - I still text them now and again. I’m fifteen now, five ft 3, got bleach blonde hair and size 32D tits! I’m only 7 stone as well!. My friend reckons all the boys love me but it’s a lie. Well I’m not stunning but I’m not ugly either. My friend Alyssa is really pretty, and no boys are interested in her, I really can’t understand why! She has a great figure and a great personality. She’s tall and thin and she has really nice skin, always tanned, she has the most lovely hair; long, dark and wavy. I love her to bits.
I live in London with my Mam (Claire), Dad (Paul), My brother Justin who is three and my sister Anna who is also three. They are twins! And a pain in the arse! My lovely dog max, who I love to bits, he’s a husky and he has really nice bright blue eyes, I love him more than I love the twins, which isn’t much anyway, but I love my dog lots and lots. And my brother Bradley, who is eighteen and lush, if he wasn’t my brother I’d do him right, left, and centre. But nobody needs to know that, let’s just keep it our little secret. He’s really tall, 6 ft 3, he’s got brown hair with a blonde streak through it. He’s proper chocco he loves himself just like me (it must run in the family). He drives a mint, lush car, it’s a black Subaru impreza, with gold alloys and a huge exhaust its litrally big enough to fit my head in not that I tried lol (well maybe I’m just exaggerating you can’t fit your head in there,just your fist). Instead of the doors opening normally, they open upwards so the car looks like it has wings. It’s awesome. It has Subaru written up the side in luminous yellow. It’s a real head turner. My brother is a player, he brings a different girl home every week, he probs has 3 on the go, lucky bitches! He makes me lie for him when he can’t be arsed to see them, they ring up and say “hiya, is Bradley there?” and I either talk in a stupid accent saying “sorry wrong number” or or tell them politely to go away saying “no he’s not. fuck off”.
Me and my brother are really close. We go shopping every Saturday, I love it when all the girls stare at us thinking he’s my boyfriend. Untill then one of his many bitches turns up… and then he goes up to them and snogs the face off them, then people will know that he’s not my boyfriend. Have you seen John Tucker Must Die? He reminds me of him, it’s a really good film y’know, you should watch it sometime. John Tucker in the film is mint!
Anyway more about me, I go to Rose High School where all the mint boys go, I could go on forever naming them all theres; James Carter - who looks like Leonardo Di’Caprio in his younger days (yummy)… unfortunately he is seeing Charlotte McDonald the biggest slag going, then theres; Michael Wilkins - who has the nicest eyes in the world, then theres; Cian Jackson - who stars in all the school shows and rock challenge every year and is stunning! It’s a real bummer he’s gay though. Then theres; Carl Williams - he is mixed race, he has one hell of a six pack and a huge thing, not that I have seen it but he’s size thirteen in shoes so it cant be small, they know what they say about men with big feet right ,you can see it bobbing around when he runs in P.E not that I look, I’m not a perv. The list could go on and on and on and on. I change the subject loads. I may look like a stuck up cow, but I’m really down to earth I even fart! My name is Sadie-ann I’ve got my car ready for when I can drive; it’s a light pink two seater soft top MGF. The number plate reads S4D13 cool huh? I even have Sadie written up the side of the car in bright green, there is a huge spoiler on the back as well. I always leave my homework until the last minute, I’m really unorganised. I love my family and friends loads. I think you know enough about me for the time being, you will find out more later.

that's the introduction, it's stupid. the actual story is better :)
if you can be bothered to read it, here's chapter one. theres like loads of spelling mistakes i need to go over it again.


“Sadie!”, my Mam called from the bottom of the stairs. “Time for school love”
“fuck off, Mam.”
“get your arse down here now!.”
“whatever. Be there now rocky melons!.” I laughed to myself. I crack myself up sometimes. Well the reason I called my Mam rocky melons is because she had this boob job about a year and a half ago and she wanted to go up to a F cup, they kind of went bigger than a F cup and rock hard, she has no bounce in them they’re just stuck there. They look so fake. She thinks she’s 17 again.
So I get up and realise that the time is 7:45.
“shit gotta hurry up.” I’m usually up by 7 to do my hair and shave my pubes off and things, so I rush out of bed in my pink luminous thongs and my pink luminous frilly bra which I always sleep in because it’s so comfy but I wash it on weekends. I ran across the landing (half naked, in my bra and knickers arse bouncing the lot) where my brother just came out of his bedroom I soon woke him up lol.
I jumped in the shower, washed my hair and bits and bobs, jumped back out, dried my hair, straightened my fringe, looked out of the window and it was pissing down so I didn’t straighten the rest of my hair as it would go curly anyway. I got curly hair you see, it’s quite nice I don’t know why I straighten it so often it just ruins your hair I should keep it curly more often. My Mam thinks I look a lot nicer with my hair curly but I still don’t listen, I couldn’t live without my straighteners.
“Braaaad” “quick give me a lift to school will you?”
“No, piss off.”
“Oii But, I really need a lift please.”
“Alright then, half hour yeah babe?” “ I need to do my hair see”
“Oright aii, it’ll give me time to do my make up then save me from doing it in school. Thanks Brad”
he looked so mint in his Calvin Klein boxers. I shouldn’t be saying that about my brother but fuck it, who wouldn’t?. I put my make-up on perfectly took some photos to go on bebo then Bradley called me.
“come on babes”
why is he calling me babe all of a sudden? Was he pissed? Did he have a hangover? Was he seriously mentally ill?
I got in the car and he drove me to school.
“so you think I’m mint then do you babe?” “your not so bad yourself, if you wasn’t my sister I’d bang you” he was winking at this stage.
What the hell was I suppose to say?…
“err, where the hell did you get that from of course I don’t fancy my own brother that’s disgusting!”
“well that’s not what it said in your diary” he said slyly.
“you nosey bastard!, poking your nose into my things!”
“no but I’d like to poke something else in your things” he said laughing.
I didn’t find it at all funny, I never knew he was such a pervert. Then he pulled me over to him and kissed me, not a family sort of kiss either.
“GET OFF ME!” “stop the car I’ll walk to rest of the way” “;pervert.”
“sorry sis, but I had a urge to do that, I’ve been wanting to do that for ages!”
“whats wrong with you Brad?, your well out of order, I’m your sister for gods sake.”
“sorry sis, that won’t happen again” “ I still feel rough from drinking non-stop yesterday with T-bag, Mickey, Pricey and BeeJay” “anyway we’re here get your arse out of my car, ring me if you want a lift home.”
“kay, thanks.”
I couldn’t tell anyone what had happened, well maybe just Alyssa she wouldn’t tell anybody I know that for sure. We share so many secrets like this one time in maths class Carl Williams the mint one with the big dong, tried putting his hand up her skirt so she got out her scissors and tried to chop his dong off lol.
I started walking up the drive when Bradley came running up to me, picked me up and gave me a big hug and said “I’m so sorry, I don’t know what happened.” “ you know I wouldn’t do anything to you if I was sober and wouldn’t let any other boy touch you” “love you sis.”
then he ran off back to his car and shouted “ring me if you want a lift.”
aww bless him, I’ve never seen him so sorry in all of his life, he usually doesn’t say sorry to anyone.
I walked up to the gates where Alyssa was waiting for me. On the way up I was talking to Carl and he was saying how nice my hair looked when it was curly, why was he talking to me? We had a massive argument about what happened under the table with Alyssa, my thing is you touch my friends feel my fist, well he felt it alright I punched him right in the balls, I felt so guilty afterwards.
“uh, thanks?” “is that a compliment or are you just being sarky?.”
“it’s a compliment, why would I be sarky with the mintest girl in year 11”
I think he was flirting with me to get to Alyssa.
“shove off. You haven’t talked to me for ages now you decide to talk?, your not getting to me that easily and I’m not buying it, now you and your bobbing dong jog off kiddie.”
“why don’t you and your 32D tits run off so I can watch them bounce” he said winking.
“that’s disgusting you perv, if you want your balls to be swollen and red like they was the last time I punched them I would shut the fuck up!.” I said as I slapped him in the face, I was fuming, and to top it all the first lesson I had was games, so I had to watch his dong bobbing about the bloody pervert. When I thought I finally got to Alyssa after being harassed by Carl, guess who was to turn up then? James bloody Carter.
“oright babe?”
“why are you calling me babe you have a girlfriend?”
“nah but I had a girlfriend” “finished with her last night, because she didn’t fancy a shag”
“that’s terrible, you can’t finish her because of that!”
“want a bet?”
“yeh”
“shut up” he said.
“make me?”
“I’ll make you” he said cheekily.
Then he kissed me,tounges and all. I looked up and Chalotte McDonald was giving me one hell of a dirty look.
“get off me mun, I’ve been harassed enough this morning and I haven’t even got into school yet”
“ring me after school and we can go to the cinema or something yeah?”
“yeah whatever,”
luckily I havnt got his number, but I bet it won’t take him long to find mine.
I walked on a little further and who was to stop me them? Charlotte the slag.
“hey Sadie, I seen that your getting close to James?”
“nah, its not what it looked like he just came up to me and harassed me, for your information” “so what if I was friendly with him, it wouldn’t concern you anyway!, face it you and James are over!.”
“never to god, I’m not retarded” “gosh, doesn’t news get around fast these days?.”
;piss off you stuck up slag.” I said as she pulled my hair.
“slag? Huh funny aren’t you look at yourself!.”
that was it, I’ve had enough of her over the years being a right bitch to Alyssa, so this was the day when I could finally express my feelings, I kicked her legs from underneath her, sat on top of her giving her proper hard punches in the face.
Just as I thought this day couldn’t get any worse I heard.
“Sadie! Get to Mr.Howl’s office immediately!”
I didn’t care, she deserved all the puches, bites and smacks that I gave her!, so I got off her and followed Miss. Tucker to the Headmasters office, Miss.Tucker she was head of the puberty classes and god didn’t she know her stuff,bet she was a slag in her younger days. One time one of the boys asked her what If they’re dick was to big to fit in the girls bit and then she said it can never get too to big the walls of the vagina stretches allowing the penis to slide in. what a perv. When that minging question was asked the whole class turned to look at Carl who was sitting there looking rather proud. I bet he had a hard-on at that point, with all the girls looking at him. I simply said sorry to Alyssa and said that I would see her later.
As I was walking down the corridor to isolation who was to stop me yet again?, James.
“heard you had a cat fight with my ex mrs”
“yeah I did and I’m proud she deserved it” “she was pissing me off and it’s all because of you, she seen you kiss me you stupid bastard.”
“well it’s not my fault like, just bad timing.”
“yeah blame the bad timing, you knew she was standing there watching.” “get a life you low life piece of shit.”
“no need of that is there babe?”
“don’t you dare call me babe!”
“why not?”
“cos’ I said so alright?.”
“whatever I’ll see you later.”
“no you fucking wont I’ll make sure of that James!.”
“I’ll find you somehow sexy” he winked at me.
“I’m having a bad enough day as it is, you don’t want puffy red balls like Carl do you?” “because it could be arranged now piss off!.”
finally he left me alone. But then who was to stop me? Carl. He bumped into me on purpose he had one hell of a stiffy it poked me in the back it really hurt. He said hiyah, but I just ignored him and carried on walking, I had a plank of wood around my neck saying ‘isolation’ at least the writing was in pink. I looked like one hell of a dork. I finally got to room A47 which was also used as the sixth form study room. I walked in through the door and the room was jam packed full of mint sixth form boys I was in heaven. This one lad turned to me and said;
“what year are you in then?”
“11 why?”
“you look older, you look about 18/19.”
“is that a good thing or bad thing” I said laughing.
“what are you doing in here then, you don’t look the naughty type” he winked half way through the sentence.
“fighing” I said proudly “she deserved every bit of it, fucking slag.”
“oh, tidy good on you” “what was you fighting for en?.”
“well, this boy was talking to me and it was her ex and she thought the worst, but it wasn’t like that we was just having a friendly chat because we have known each other for years, but then he went a tad too far kissed me like, the perv, then she was giving me evils and everything, I was like what the hell have I done to you, you stuck up snob.”
“ah. Sounds good was the girl Charlotte by any chance?”
“yeah, how do you know?”
“ah, I know everything I do” “anyway get on with your work”
“nah, I’d rather talk to you, your mega”
“fair enough like, have you got a brother?”
“yeah, Bradley Vaughn.”
“oh, I can see the resemblance now, I know Bradley, I got wrecked with him and the boys the other day.”
“he did say he got hammerd the other day, T-bag, Mickey, BeeJay, And someone else.”
“aii, I’m Mickey I am.”
“oh right nice too meet you” “if I go to the loo a min if any of the teachers come in say I’ve been doing my work yeah?”
“ok see you in a bit.”
I walked out of the door bolted down the corridors to the toilets burst through the toilet door locked the door behind me pulled down my skirt and panties, as I thought this day couldn’t get any worse than it already was I had one hell of a bad stomach, the shite flew out of my arse like a bullet. God it felt nice to get it out. But it burnt like a bitch. I hate having the shits in school. Great a gang of girls just came in all talking about what’s hot and what’s not while applying mascara, eyeliner, shit loads of foundation, prostitute smelling perfume to cover up the bad smell that I had left in the toilet, I was trying my hardest to stop my arse talking but it wouldn’t work.
“gosh who is in that toilet?”
great I could tell by the voices that it was one of Charlottes sluts.
“I don’t know chrissy but they must of ate something that didn’t agree with them for breakfast.”
“true, god bless them”
“god bless them, my arse!” Charlotte said.
“don’t be mean Charlotte!”
“if you think that was mean, I’m going to look under the door to see who had the shits and tell the whole school.”
oh great. What could I do now? My life was totally over. Not just that I would be humiliated by Charlotte telling everyone I had the shits her friends would corner me in the corner of the toilets and absolutely batter me.
I wiped my arse, pulled up my knickers and skirt, looked through my bag to find my perfume but I didn’t have it with me. Great!. I pulled the flush, quietly opened the window and squeezed through, luckily the noise of the flush covered up my footsteps as I made my escape.
I ran around the back of the school to try and go through the side door to get back into the building but it was locked. “shit.” I went to walk around the front of the school when I seen Mrs.Tucker.
“oh your not taking advantage of being in icolation are you? Coming out of the school for a quick smoke!?”
“no miss. I’m not a smoker”
“are you being cheeky Miss.Vaughn?”
“no miss. I’m just saying that I don’t smoke, I don’t like people accusing me of something that I don’t do you see miss.”
“you’ve blown it, you now have three days in icolation.”
“oh but miss” “it wasn’t what it looked like.”
“oh I think it was”
“how much you want a bet miss?.”
“don’t come cheeky with me young lady!.”
“well don’t accuse me of something that I didn’t do !.”
“well sorry I don’t care if you was smoking or not, you know that the back of the school is out of bounds in lesson times and you know perfectly well that you shouldn’t be there.”
“oh miss, fuck off”
“right that’s a week in isolation.”
“good”
“make it two weeks”
“like shit”
“that’s enough get back to the study room now!.” “I shall see you there”
“how can I get in stupid!, the doors are locked.”
“well you’ll have to walk with me then”
“like shit am I being seen with you!” “I’ll walk the other way.”
“don’t stop and have a cigarette on the way will you?”
“of course not miss” I smiled like an angel, resisting the urge to bitch slap her across the face. God she’s such a bitch. I couldn’t wait to get home.
When I got back to the study room and sat at the desk ready to do my work, I looked at the paper and all my work was done for me.
“hows that Brads sister?” Mickey said smiling at me.
“awh, you didn’t have to do my work for me just tell the teachers that I’ve been a good girl.”
“well tough your brothers a good man, and I thought I would do his little sister a favour because your having a shit day.”
“shit?, it’s just got even worse, by the way do I smell?.”
“no. why would you smell?.”
“well it’s a long story”
“I like long stories.”
God this would be really embarrassing but I know he would tell nobody he’ll just laugh it off then forget it.
“okay, here goes, you know when I needed the toilet really bad yeah well I had the shits, and Charlotte and her lot came into the toilet saying ‘who’s shit in here and everything’ so I flushed, then opened the window ran out, then who should I see then?, Miss.Tucker the thought that I was smoking up the back of the school but I wasn’t so then I told her that I don’t smoke and she didn’t believe me. So then we was arguing I called her a bitch and whatever have you ,you know. The usual.”
“your very open about things aren’t you?.”
“hmm.. Yeah”
“like your brother then”
“why whats he open about?”
“well, when we was all pissed he was saying that he quite liked you and that, but he was pissed mind you!” “don’t tell him I told you?”
“no, I won’t I already knew he told me this morning when he brought me to school.”
“oh right.” “glad I wasn’t the first to tell you then”
“well anyway this is the worst day of my life, I don’t think anyone or anything can make it even worse.”
then as I thought I was saved by the break time bell, I wasn’t aloud to go to break, so I couldn’t go to see Alyssa. I’m fuming now. Miss’Tucker came in to watch that I was behaving, what would she know anyway she couldn’t control a tortoise. And they’re slow! Very slow! I kept tapping my pen on the table which was really doing her head in, she told me to stop a few times but I didn’t listen, I kept on and on.
“Sadie, stop it now”
“no”
“Sadie!” she was giving me evils.
I ignored her and carried on tapping the table. She hated people who tapped the table, especially when the boys drum on the tables with their pens.
“fine, get out go to break but be back here for third lesson.”
“thanks miss” “I will.”
I took the sign from around my neck and left it on the desk, I ran out the door to find Alyssa she was bothering with Charlotte and co.
“Hia babe I’ve missed you hun.” she said. “haven’t seen you all day well all morning”
“yeah, whatever what are you doing with the sluts?”
“oh, I was just talking to then about the show”
“so, you’ve asked them about doing the show instead of me?.”
“uh.. Yeah, well seen as you probably wouldn’t be aloud because you’ve been in icolation so much this month.”
“I’ve only been in icolation 4 times!!, forget it Liss, I thought we were friends.”
“we are friends, I was only talking to them, I don’t like them I just need someone to do the show with me.”
“if you were a real friend you would drop out of the show yourself if your best friend couldn’t make it, but don’t worry.” “I’ve got a new friend.’Mickey’”
“sorry don’t get your knickers in a twist.”
“get a life”
“I’ve got one thanks” she snapped back.
I stormed off, I was really really pissed off now. The day dragged on. Finally the bell went for hometime, Mickey asked if I wanted a lift home because he was going to see my brother anyway so I though yeh why not. Mickey was awesome I’d so love him to be my brother, I’ve only known him a day and he was already acting like a brother, well a better brother than mine anyway. We got to the house and my brother was standing on the front door step looking fuming…

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